tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10487188.post5966702595647545931..comments2023-08-12T03:14:16.855-05:00Comments on The Least Read Blog on the Web: FFF Part III -- Something's Rotten in GarretsburgJohnhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13919292358655167603noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10487188.post-78881698070531470672013-04-01T16:10:56.079-05:002013-04-01T16:10:56.079-05:00For a lot of Veronica's soliloquies, I figure ...For a lot of Veronica's soliloquies, I figure she'd turn on the camera, set it down, and speak into it. It's not elegant, but think of those sections as a sort of vlog.Johnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13919292358655167603noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10487188.post-72492016141724271152013-04-01T10:23:51.026-05:002013-04-01T10:23:51.026-05:00The "wall of text" part starts when we s...The "wall of text" part starts when we see the Staci and Leon and the documentary, and I actually think that that part seems very workable. After all, there are plenty of natural cuts. I don't think it's going to be too long, either, but it's hard to tell by just reading the synopsis.<br /><br />One thing to consider: How do we know what happens before Veronica turns on Leon's footage? Is Veronica recording herself giving an explanation? Does she just have the camera on and point it at everything? That part sounds tricky.Bainespalhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02036151461448619765noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-10487188.post-58916999576878916982013-03-30T11:32:02.597-05:002013-03-30T11:32:02.597-05:00I think Lisa needs visual aids. I see that her fam...I think Lisa needs visual aids. I see that her family left a long time ago, but this is a pretty detached description of what happened. It's believable that she would distance herself and tell in this fashion, but if she's being asked to tell this, she would have had time to pull some pictures off the internet or print microfiche articles to display as she talks. (She doesn't mention anything about her life at this time, which is odd. No friends, no bullying, no belief or disappointment in her father. As a character-driven writer, I want more from her.) <br /><br />I also find it odd that Weathers wasn't followed back. Whoever's covering their tracks in Garretsburg should have been looking for that missing camera footage, especially if they knew the students were filming. Have the kids been missing long enough to file missing persons reports? This might be a good point for Weathers to inject that news. ESPECIALLY if the investigation later stops because "there is no file." :) <br /><br />It's intriguing, I'll admit...Lex Keatinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06615789417676118852noreply@blogger.com